From: | Bernard Clement <bernard(dot)clement(at)b2b2c(dot)ca> |
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To: | pgsql-advocacy(at)postgresql(dot)org |
Cc: | Josh Berkus <josh(at)agliodbs(dot)com>, Lance Obermeyer <LObermey(at)pervasive(dot)com> |
Subject: | Re: 4th draft up -- get your comments in! |
Date: | 2005-10-07 16:54:49 |
Message-ID: | 200510071254.49937.bernard.clement@b2b2c.ca |
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Josh,
My pinch of salt about the usage of "enhanced" and "improved". You can also
used "better" and "superior". All those 4 words are synonyms.
IMHO, it is not too bad to use a certain word twice and I will let be like it
is.
Bernard
PS Hoping that my message will go through...I do not remember with which email
address I subscribed.
On Friday 07 October 2005 12:40, Josh Berkus wrote:
> Lance,
>
> > Only one nitpick. In the features section, we twice say the feature is
> > for 8.1. That seems implied to me. I recommend dropping the clause
> > "for 8.1" in "the buffer manager for 8.1 has..." and "in version 8.1," in
> > "in version 8.1, the query planner is ..."
>
> OK, I'll take a look. I'm a little more concerned about the fact that
> I use the words "enhanced" and "improved" at least 6 times each, and
> "refactored" twice. Bonus points for anyone who can find ways to
> replace some of these!
>
> Also, Lance, I thought I had an "about Pervasive" on file, but I don't
> seem to. Can you get me the 4 line version? Thanks!
>
> --Josh
>
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